๋ค์์ ๊ฐ๋จํ ์ง์นจ์ ๋ฐ๋ผ ์ฐ๊ธฐ ๋ฅ๋ ฅ์ ํฅ์ํ์ธ์. ์์ฒญ์ด ๊ฐ๋ฅํ ๊ฒฝ์ฐ ํ์ด์ง ํ๋จ์ผ๋ก ์ด๋ํด ๋ผ์ดํ Task 2์ ๋ฐด๋ 7์ ํฅํ 7๋จ๊ณ์ ๋ํ ๋์ผ ์ ๋ณด๊ฐ ๋ด๊ธด ๋น๋์ค๋ฅผ ์์ฒญํ์ธ์.
1๋จ๊ณ: ์ง๋ฌธ์ ๋ชจ๋ ๋ถ๋ถ์ ๋ตํ๊ธฐ
์์ด์์ธ ๋ผ์ดํ Task 2์์๋ ๋ฌธ์ฅ ๋๋ ์ ์ ์ ๋ํ ์๋ต์ผ๋ก ์์ธ์ด๋ฅผ ์์ฑํด์ผ ํฉ๋๋ค. ์ง๋ฌธ์ ์ฃผ์ ๊น๊ฒ ์ฝ๊ณ ๋ชจ๋ ๋ถ๋ถ์ ๋ํด ๋ตํด์ผ ํฉ๋๋ค. ์๋ฅผ ๋ค์ด, ์๋ ์ง๋ฌธ์์ ์์ ๋ฐด๋๋ฅผ ๋ฌ์ฑํ๊ธฐ ์ํ 3๊ฐ์ง๋ฅผ ์ํํด์ผ ํ๋ฉฐ, ์ด๋ ์ฌ๋ฌ๋ถ์ด ๊ณผ์ ์ ๋ชจ๋ ๋ถ๋ถ์ ์ฒ๋ฆฌํ๊ณ ์์์ ์ํ๊ด์๊ฒ ๋ณด์ฌ์ฃผ๋ ๊ฒ์ ๋๋ค.
ํ๋์ ๊ด์ ์ ์ํ๊ธฐ
๋ค๋ฅธ ๊ด์ ์ ์ํ๊ธฐ
์๊ฒฌ ์ ์ํ๊ธฐ
์ง๋ฌธ ์์:
Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
ํ๋์ ๊ด์ ๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ ๋ค๋ฅธ ๊ด์ ์ ์ํ๊ธฐ๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ ๋์ ์๊ฒฌ ์ ์ํ๊ธฐ.
Wild animals are kept in zoos all over world. At present, zoos are a tourist attraction in many countries and need wild animals to attract vistors. I beleve that wild creatures should not be kept in zoos and there should be alternative ways to see them.
There are many good reasons for having zoos in our cities. Most importantly, they attract tourists and make money for city. Visitors get chance to see wild animals that they would not see unless they travelled far away. Rare species, like Chinese panda, or Indian tiger, or African rhino for example, are endangered and if we had no zoos they would die. Zoos care for these aminals and give us chance to see them. Therefore, we cannot underestimate the educational importance of zoos.
However, many people feel that wild animals should be free. They should not be kept in cages and small areas in zoo. This is cruel for animal and they often die because they is not in natural habitat. We frequently see news story about rare animals dying in zoos or getting sick because area is not big enough or suitable for wild animals like lions or polar bears. Also, these animals are unhappy and sometimes attack humans. Caging wild animals is unhealthy for the animals and is cruel.
Both views put forward valid points, however, I strongly believe that zoos are no place for wild animals. If animals need to be cared for, they should be looked after in theier natural habitat in game parks or wildlife reserves. Goverments should look after the precious wild animals at their country and should close down zoos that profit from them.
In conclusion, although people believe that zoos are good places to keep wild animals because they can earn money and educate people, I feel that we do not need zoos anymore. We can look at wild animals on the internet and we can feel happy knowing that they are free.
2๋จ๊ณ: ๋ช ํํ ์ ์ฅ ์ ์ํ๊ธฐ
์์ธ์ด์์ ๋ค๋ฅธ ๊ด์ ์ ์ ์ํ๊ณ ์๋๋ผ๋, ๋ถ๋ช ํ ๋ด ์ ์ฅ์ ๋ณด์ฌ์ค์ผ ํฉ๋๋ค. ์ด๋ ๊ฐ๋จํ ๋งํ๋ฉด ์ง๋ฌธ์ ๋ํด ์ด๋ป๊ฒ ์๊ฐํ๋์ง ์ํ๊ด์๊ฒ ์๋ ค์ผ ํ๋ค๋ ์๋ฏธ์ ๋๋ค. ์์ธ์ด๋ฅผ ์์ฑํ๋ ค๋ฉด ์ ์ฅ์ด ๋ช ํํด์ผ ํฉ๋๋ค. ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์์ ๋ง์์ ๋ฐ๊ฟ์๋ ์ ๋ฉ๋๋ค.
Both views put forward valid points, however, I strongly believe...
However, many people feel that...
I believe that wild creatures should not be kept in zoos...
3๋จ๊ณ: ์์ธ์ด ๊ตฌ์ฑํ๊ธฐ
์์ธ์ด ์์ฑ์ด ๋ฐ๋์ ์ด๋ ค์ด ๊ณผ์ ์ผ ํ์๋ ์์ต๋๋ค. ๊ฐ ์์ด๋์ด๋ฅผ ์ ์ํ๊ณ ๋ฐ์ ์ํค๊ธฐ ์ํด ๋จ๋ฝ์ ์ฌ์ฉํ์ฌ ์ฒด๊ณ์ ์ธ ๋ฐฉ์์ผ๋ก ์์ด๋์ด๋ฅผ ์ ์ํฉ๋๋ค. ์์ธ์ด๋ฅผ ๊ตฌ์ฑํ๋ ๋ฐ ๋์์ด ๋๋๋ก ๋ค์ ์ฌํญ์ ํ์ฉํ์ธ์.
์๋ก ๋จ๋ฝ์ผ๋ก ๋ ์์๊ฒ ์์ํ ๊ณณ์ ๋ณด์ฌ์ค๋๋ค.
์ค์ํ ์์ด๋์ด๋ฅผ ์ ์ํ๊ณ ๋ ์์ธํ ์ค๋ช ํฉ๋๋ค.
์ง๋ฌธ์ ๋ํ ์๊ฒฌ์ผ๋ก ์์ธ์ด๋ฅผ ๋ง๋ฌด๋ฆฌํฉ๋๋ค.
๊ฐ ๋จ๋ฝ ๋ด์์ ๋ช ํํ ์์ด๋์ด๋ฅผ ๋ฐ์ ์ํต๋๋ค.
๊ฐ ๋ฌธ๋จ ์ฌ์ด์ ๊ณต๋ฐฑ์ ๋์ด ์ํ๊ด์ด ์ฝ๊ฒ ์ดํดํ ์ ์๋๋ก ํฉ๋๋ค.
์์ธ์ด ์์
์๋ก
Wild animals are kept in zoos all over world. At present, zoos are a tourist attraction in many countries and need wild animals to attract vistors. I heire that wild creatures should not be kept in zoos and there should be alternative ways to see them.
์ฒซ ๋ฒ์งธ ๊ด์
There are many good reasons for having zoos in our cities. Most importantly, they attract tourists and make money for city. Visitors get chance to see wild animals that they would not see unless they travelled far away. Rare species, like Chinese panda, or Indian tiger, or African rhino for example, are endangered and if we had no zoos they would die. Zoos care for these aminals and give us chance to see them. Therefore, we cannot underestimate he educational importance of zoos.
๋ ๋ฒ์งธ ๊ด์
However, many people feel that wild animals should be free. They should not be kept in cages and small areas in zoo. This is heir for animal and they often die because they is not in natural habitat. We frequently see news story about rare animals dying in zoos or getting sick because area is not big enough or suitable for wild animals like lions or polar bears. Also, these animals are unhappy and sometimes attack humans. Caging wild animals is unhealthy for the animals and is cruel.
๋์ ์๊ฒฌ
Both views put forward valid points, however, I strongly believe that zoos are no place for wild animals. If animals need to be cared for, they should be looked after in heir natural habitat in game parks or wildlife reserves. Goverments should look after the precious wild animals at their country and should close down zoos that profit from them.
๊ฒฐ๋ก
In conclusion, although people believe that zoos are good places to keep wild animals because they can earn money and educate people, I feel that we do not need zoos anymore. As far as I am concerned, wild animals should be set free.
4๋จ๊ณ: ์ฐ๊ฒฐ ์ด๊ตฌ ์ฌ์ฉ
์ฐ๊ฒฐ ์ด๊ตฌ ๋๋ ์ ํ ํํ(transition words)์ ๋จ์ด์ ์ด๊ตฌ๋ฅผ ์ฐ๊ฒฐํด ๋ต์์ ๊ฒฐ์์ฑ์ ๋ง๋ญ๋๋ค. ์ฌ๋ฌ๋ถ์ ๋ฌธ์ฅ๊ณผ ์์ด๋์ด๋ฅผ ํ๋๋ก ๋ฌถ๋ ์ ์ฐฉ์ ์ ๊ฐ์ต๋๋ค. ์๋ ํ๋ ์์ธ์ด์์ ์์ฃผ ์ฌ์ฉ๋๋ ์ผ๋ถ ์ฐ๊ฒฐ์ด๋ฅผ ๋ณด์ฌ์ค๋๋ค.
On one hand | Whereas |
On the other hand | Because |
Firstly | Similarly |
Another | Finally |
However | Nevertheless |
Despite | Consequently |
Although | In conclusion |
Regardless | In addition |
For example | As a result |
Therefore | Undoubtedly |
5๋จ๊ณ: ๋ค์ํ ์ดํ ์ฌ์ฉ
์ฐ๊ธฐ๋ ์ฌ๋ฌ๋ถ์ ์๊ฐ๊ณผ ์์ด๋์ด๋ฅผ ๋ ์์๊ฒ ์ ๋ฌํ๋ ์๋จ์ ๋๋ค. ๋ฐ๋ผ์ ์ดํดํ๊ธฐ ์ฌ์ด ์ดํ๋ฅผ ์ฌ์ฉํ์๊ธฐ ๋ฐ๋๋๋ค. ๋ํ, ์ฌ์ด ์ฒ ์์ ๋จ์ด๋ฅผ ์ฌ์ฉํ์ธ์. ์๋ก ์์ฐ์ค๋ฝ๊ฒ ์ฐ๊ฒฐ๋๋ ๋จ์ด๋ฅผ ์ฌ์ฉํฉ๋๋ค. ์ฆ, ์์ธ์ด์ ์ฐ์ด, ๊ด์ฉ์ด ๋ฐ ๊ตฌ๋์ฌ๋ฅผ ํฌํจํฉ๋๋ค. ์ด๋ ์ํ๊ด์๊ฒ ๋ค์ํ ์ดํ๋ฅผ ์ฌ์ฉํ ์ ์์์ ์ฆ๋ช ํ๋ ๊ฒ์ ๋๋ค. ๋ง์ง๋ง์ผ๋ก, ์ฐ๊ธฐ ๊ณผ์ ๋ฅผ ์๋ฃํ ํ ์ฒ ์ ์ค๋ฅ์ ์คํ๋ฅผ ํ์ธํ์ธ์.
์ฐ์ด์ ์:
Tourist attraction
Alternate ways
Rare species
Natural habitat
๊ด์ฉ์ด ๋ฐ ๊ตฌ๋์ฌ์ ์:
To be cared for
Close down
Make money
Chance to see
Looked after
6๋จ๊ณ: ๋ค์ํ ๋ฌธ๋ฒ ๊ตฌ์กฐ ์ฌ๋ฐ๋ฅด๊ฒ ์ฌ์ฉํ๊ธฐ
๋ฐด๋ 7์ ๋ชฉํ๋ก ํ ๋๋ ๋จ์ํ ๋ฌธ์ฅ๊ณผ ๋ณต์กํ ๋ฌธ์ฅ์ ๋ชจ๋ ๋ง์คํฐํด์ผ ํฉ๋๋ค. ๋ํ ์ค๋ฅ ์๋ ๋ฌธ์ฅ์ ๊ฐ๋ฅํ ๋ง์ด ์์ฑํด์ผ ํ๋ค๋ ์ ์ ๊ธฐ์ตํ์ธ์. ๊ทธ๋ ๋ค๋ฉด, ์ด๋ป๊ฒ ์ด ๋ชฉํ๋ฅผ ๋ฌ์ฑํ ์ ์์๊น์? ๋ค, ์ฐ์ตํด์ผ ํฉ๋๋ค. ์ํ ๋ฌธ์ ๋ก ํ ์คํธํด ๋ณด๊ณ , ์์ฃผ ํ๋ ์ค์๋ฅผ ๋ถ์ํฉ๋๋ค. ๊ณ์ํด์ ๋ค๋ฅธ ๋ฌธ์ฅ ๊ตฌ์กฐ๋ฅผ ์ฐ์ตํ ๋, ์ฃผ์ด์ง ์ฃผ์ ์ ๋ํ ์์ธ์ด ์์ฑ์ด ๊ฐ์ ๋ ๊ฒ์ด๋ผ ํ์ ํฉ๋๋ค.
๋ฌธ๋ฒ์ ๊ตฌ์กฐ์ ์
๊ด์ฌ | Most importantly, they attract tourists and make money forโฏ(the)โฏcity;โฏvisitors getโฏ(a)โฏchance |
์ฃผ์ด/๋์ฌ ์ผ์น | because theyโฏisโฏ(are)โฏnot in naturalโฏ |
์ ์น์ฌ | wild animals atโฏ(in)โฏtheir countryโฏ |
๋ณต์ | We frequently see news storyโฏ(stories) |
๊ตฌ๋์ | Most importantly,โฏtheyโฏattract tourists and make money for the city. |
7๋จ๊ณ: ์์ธ์ด ์ฒ ์ ํ ํ์ธํ๊ธฐ
์๋ฒฝํ ์์ธ์ด๋ฅผ ์์ฑํ ํ์๋ ๋ถ์ฃผ์ํ ์ฒ ์๋ฒ๊ณผ ๋ฌธ๋ฒ์์ ์ค์๋ฅผ ํ ์ ์์ต๋๋ค. ์์ธ์ด๋ฅผ ์ฒ ์ ํ ๊ฒํ ํ๋ฉด ์ด๋ฐ ๊ฒ๋ค์ ์ฝ๊ฒ ์ ๊ฑฐํ ์ ์์ต๋๋ค. ์ฐ๊ธฐ ๊ณผ์ ๋ฅผ ์๋ฃํ๋ฉด ๋ค์์ ์๋ฌธํด ๋ณด์ธ์.
๋ชจ๋ ๋ถ๋ถ์ ๋ํด ๋ต๋ณํ๋๊ฐ?
๋จ๋ฝ์ ์ฌ์ฉํ๋๊ฐ?
์ฐ๊ฒฐ์ด๋ฅผ ์ฌ์ฉํ๋๊ฐ?
๊ตฌ๋์ ์ ์ฌ์ฉํ๋๊ฐ?
์์ฑํ ๊ฒ์ ํ์ธํ๋๊ฐ?
์ฒ ์๊ฐ ์ฌ๋ฐ๋ฅด๊ณ ๋ค์ํ ์ดํ๋ฅผ ์ฌ์ฉํ๋๊ฐ?
๋ณต์กํ ๋ฌธ์ฅ ๊ตฌ์กฐ๋ฅผ ์ฌ์ฉํ๋๊ฐ?
์ด๋ฌํ ์ง๋ฌธ์ ๊ธ์ ์ ์ผ๋ก ๋๋ตํ ์ ์๋ค๋ฉด ๋ฐด๋ 7์ ์ ์๋ฅผ ๋ฐ์ ์ ์์ต๋๋ค!
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